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Galev
Famous Hero
Galiv :D
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posted September 10, 2008 10:50 PM |
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Edited by Galev at 23:09, 10 Sep 2008.
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Oh, I (used to) write... some bits... Well, I give a try. Please note, that Hungarian differs from English very much. If there are expressions or images you don't catch, please let me know. Also about grammar...
A short old one:
Freak desires
We want to be more,
we want to be else;
but we became poor,
we became less.
Sorry, I'm usually good at improvising, but not know, not after this day (and probably not in English) Perhabs an other time.
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Just remember: I have a translations of an Endre Ady poem.
Coach-way in the night
How unwhole the Moon today is,
the night is silent and desert,
what sadness in me is at work,
how unwhole the Moon today is.
All what's whole broke into pieces,
every flame just burns in parts,
every love now lies in shards,
all what's whole broke into pieces.
I'm carried in a bad old cart,
as if lament followed it,
one half silence and one half noises,
I'm carried in a bad old cart.
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As it's not really [really not] mine, probably it shouldn't be "judged" in the contest, but I would love to have some English-speaking opinions. I have a few minor problems I would appriciate advices for:
-In the first part I used unwhole but I use whole in the second and it's a not-intended repeat. In the original, the Moon is "maimed". I found the word "frustum" but am unsure about its meaning.
-I also am unsure about in or on at the last part. "in a cart" or "on a cart" is more correct with English? In the original it is written something like: "A bad cart is running with me." So he is travelling with a fast but shabby cart.
Thank you.
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Incidence? I think it's cummulative!
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Celfious
Promising
Legendary Hero
From earth
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posted September 10, 2008 10:59 PM |
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Edited by Celfious at 23:00, 10 Sep 2008.
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Not bad, quite negative but highly expressive and short and sweet 
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antipaladin
Promising
Legendary Hero
of Ooohs and Aaahs
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posted September 10, 2008 11:40 PM |
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I know.that somewhere from before
I saw,Redemption at the lore
of ungreatfully four
I cant stand no More!
just hear me out
i want to speak outloud
dont tell me another time
i cant spare another dime
im not golden
the gun is load'en
Give me your lunch money!
i will wait no more,Honey!
your not my Buney!
No more
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types in obscure english
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Celfious
Promising
Legendary Hero
From earth
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posted September 13, 2008 06:09 PM |
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Edited by Celfious at 08:35, 14 Sep 2008.
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24 hours from now is the dead line to enter and write one.. I failed to write one because my music editor is to crappy to do so.
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Celfious
Promising
Legendary Hero
From earth
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posted September 13, 2008 09:43 PM |
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Edited by Celfious at 21:44, 13 Sep 2008.
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atleast I can type it in....
Greatful Hand By Celfious aka Jeremy S.
we're greatful for.
We're greatful for what we've got.
We cant belive.
We cant believe that we are not.
We're greatful for, what we've got but we're still not done.
One main purpose in this life, is to reach out and help someone.
We can say to the ones that are still suffering
There is a program that works that tyou are welcome in
You dont have to believe anything to be a member,
except believe that you want to quit drinking
Here is like moving your mind to a beach
and here we dont. try to preach to you
we simply offer the advice that we took ourselves,
like go to meetings and take the book off your dusty shelves
On this beach we show a simple path to tranquility
what we were searching for all along was serenity
Life here gets better but no thing is perfect
Except that now your in the right place your life has surfaced
No more jumping from reality or slipping away
This is a clean day
No more jumping from reality, or slipping away
No more jumping from reality, or slipping away
If you practice the principles on this very day
one day at a time
one day at a time the principle is devine
I addopt the principle as mine and today my life is fine
One day at a time, the principle is devine,
Its easy to get by, one day at a time.
And if your starting to fade
if you are starting to fade away
And if your starting to fade
if you are starting to fade away
Utilize the program and ask them to show you the way
This program has a lot to offer.
Youll notice changes this way of life is much softer
than the hard life dealing with loss and sorrow
Maybe now youll savor the day and look forward for tommorow .
One day at a time, the priciple is devine
It saved millions of lives in sobriety
It produced productive members of society
and now this is your turn to be set free
from the seemingly endless days of misery.
You can go back if you want your misery refunded
but we suggest staying around because it gets much better
Here we turn the negative into positive,
before I was dead in many ways but now I live.
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mvassilev
Responsible
Undefeatable Hero
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posted September 13, 2008 10:37 PM |
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I suck at poetry, but here goes.
The Backroads to Serfdom
They called me a selfish demon
when I didn't want to pay the
beggar for his beer and women.
And said I was antisocial.
They declared me a parasite
when I took what I earned myself
they said that I had no such right.
And said I was antiquated.
They said I hated everything
when I refused to support how
they were looting and pillaging.
And said I was anti-progress.
They told me that I should obey
and march in line with the rest of
those who heard them, but not they.
And said I was anti-leader.
They threw me into a prison
and told me to stay put until
more options were to have risen.
And said I was anti-reason.
They took me into a field
and told me to take ten paces.
One of them had a gun to wield.
And said that I was for treason.
And now they tell you that it's good
and all should be alike and fun,
and declare the end of selfhood.
But I tell you to look at me.
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Eccentric Opinion
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Celfious
Promising
Legendary Hero
From earth
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posted September 14, 2008 08:36 AM |
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Voters, readers, I thank you in advance for participating. Without you the show couldnt go on. Get ready to vote. there is less than 12 hours to turn in poetry entries.
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Mytical
Responsible
Undefeatable Hero
Chaos seeking Harmony
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posted September 14, 2008 09:42 AM |
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I would vote, but that would be BAD  . Hehe. So everybody who votes gets a shiny...imaginary quarter!! Just think..an imaginary quarter to call your very own..that is nice and shiny!!!
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mvassilev
Responsible
Undefeatable Hero
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posted September 15, 2008 12:52 AM |
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Wait, how do we vote? Can we vote for our own poems? And there seems to be a lack of participants.
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Eccentric Opinion
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Celfious
Promising
Legendary Hero
From earth
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posted September 15, 2008 03:51 AM |
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Edited by Celfious at 03:55, 15 Sep 2008.
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mvass I should have established this in the beggining but I will in a way flip a coin and say its how HC;s got tallent did this.
Ok I just checked, and I'm glad, this is the way I would have established it, but only non contestants can vote.
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mvassilev
Responsible
Undefeatable Hero
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posted September 15, 2008 04:01 AM |
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Celfious
Promising
Legendary Hero
From earth
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posted September 15, 2008 06:28 AM |
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No. . . We're all winners though!! yay
Ill promote voting
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Japangamer
Known Hero
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posted September 22, 2008 05:13 AM |
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Ok Celfious will be back I guess, someday, but not sooon because he/I doesnt know his/my password lol.
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mvassilev
Responsible
Undefeatable Hero
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posted September 22, 2008 05:41 AM |
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Why don't you just use the e-mail password function? Or contact Val?
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japangamer
Known Hero
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posted September 22, 2008 08:03 AM |
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I think i might start using this account instead, at least for now. This was my first, I made a few more not reading the rules and started a conversation with myself though to increase activity in the forums.. didn't work
Neither did this competition sorry mvass, and everyone else who wrote in.
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Mytical
Responsible
Undefeatable Hero
Chaos seeking Harmony
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posted September 24, 2008 10:51 AM |
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Eh, it was fun regardless. If I had a dollar for each of my threads that didn't get the response I thought it would...
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morgan_le_fey
Famous Hero
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posted January 23, 2009 08:52 AM |
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Sword of honor
Sword of light
Sword that burns
In the infinite night
Hallowed metal
Flaming steel
Sword that fights
And never yields
Morgan_le_fey
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