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Aculias
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Undefeatable Hero
Pretty Boy Angel Sacraficer
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posted August 25, 2011 07:06 AM |
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Lights & darks
As you live life you learn to adore
You tend in curiosity while you explore
As you try to love
You also first try to feel
As you try to adjust to the life you are given
You meditate through the darkness outside the sun
Through the night sky You dream of freedom I have not
As you feel never to be judged by me
To walk through the light to be free
As a dream you may walk upon the depths of the light
Meaningless as you glide through the stars in flight
The flowers bloom as you gleefully battle conscious thoughts trying to see you
If only You could see me. If only I could see me. If only I can see me through the dreams of my thoughts.
Can the haze be wiped from your eyes
You crying eyes.
The whisper only a name I must hear
As if anything else I fear
As of red to be mistrust
Blue may be the dawn of a new beginning
As i think of memories with giggles of the past
May I have beginnings for i have need at last
For my pillow as hard as metal
My blankets as cold as the winter snow
Can our souls really gripe
as we walk in the shadow of this night.......
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Dreaming of a Better World
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selcy
Famous Hero
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posted August 25, 2011 08:12 AM |
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Wow Acu that is deep I hope you are ok.
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Aculias
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Undefeatable Hero
Pretty Boy Angel Sacraficer
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posted August 25, 2011 08:17 AM |
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Loves ya
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selcy
Famous Hero
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posted August 25, 2011 08:41 AM |
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darkshadow
Legendary Hero
Cerise Princess
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posted August 25, 2011 08:52 AM |
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I love you all too
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Aculias
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Undefeatable Hero
Pretty Boy Angel Sacraficer
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posted August 25, 2011 09:08 AM |
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I feel the love in the air
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Duke_Falcon
Disgraceful
Supreme Hero
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posted August 25, 2011 01:21 PM |
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Acu!
This poem is a masterpiece!
Grats!
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selcy
Famous Hero
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posted August 25, 2011 02:10 PM |
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Yes he writes lovely poems.
He wrote me a really romantic one for Christmas last year brought tears to my eyes as nobody has ever treated me like that.
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Aculias
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Undefeatable Hero
Pretty Boy Angel Sacraficer
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posted August 25, 2011 04:29 PM |
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Thx Duke.
I was thinking of you & Selcy & all who is feeling down & alone.
There is always peace wherever you walk.
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selcy
Famous Hero
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posted August 25, 2011 04:32 PM |
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awww thank you Acu.
See you can be nice .
Yes I guess we all have tough times, some more than others.
Now all I need is another romantic one .
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Aculias
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Undefeatable Hero
Pretty Boy Angel Sacraficer
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posted August 25, 2011 04:35 PM |
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Your not alone.
I ate a bone
When I think of you
I really want to do.
So when the time comes.
I want to be a bum
Laying on the bed
Look at the head
There
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selcy
Famous Hero
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posted August 25, 2011 04:36 PM |
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lol I am not saying anything.
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markkur
Honorable
Legendary Hero
Once upon a time
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posted August 25, 2011 07:52 PM |
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Edited by markkur at 19:54, 25 Aug 2011.
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Great poem. I like the imagery and always treasure an effort to; capture in words, something important about life.
When seeing the line below; the next line followed for me. Without doubt, due to my own particular battle
"As you try to adjust to the life you are given"
you'll want to fly through the strife you're living
One really cool aspect about writing poetry happened here;
I don't have a clue as to what you had in mind when you penned that line but that doesn't matter much within this Art. I received it and colored-in the meaning. It's like we can share the essence of a tree but don't have to detail the thing. It would "almost" be foolish in a sense, because the receiver is going to do that that work anyway.
So many times I have written words that were say "Blue" and then I'd put a great effort in making it the deepest shade of Blue ever shared. Then after sharing my special-crafted-"Blue" I would get responses like; "Man! what an awesome Silver!" Or "I'm passing that "Gold" around.
Acu, if you're game; start a Poetry thread...I'll contribute.
For fun: the Name could be like; Wordsmith Hall, Acu's Poet-Pages or Bardburn's Cavern
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Tsar-Ivor
Promising
Legendary Hero
Scourge of God
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posted August 25, 2011 07:57 PM |
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I'd contribute to a poetry thread
Also a lovely poem.
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"No laughs were had. There is only shame and sadness." Jenny
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Aculias
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Undefeatable Hero
Pretty Boy Angel Sacraficer
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posted August 26, 2011 03:00 AM |
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I was thinking about Duke & Selcy when i wrote this.
I guess I have to be in the mode to write.
Maybe if something good or bad happens, or if i am having some feelings
Thx for the compliment.
If you look in my profile, i wrote some others before.
Some are really deep. A couple i was drunk HAHA.
Thx again for the compliment.
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markkur
Honorable
Legendary Hero
Once upon a time
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posted August 26, 2011 07:19 PM |
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Edited by markkur at 19:22, 26 Aug 2011.
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Quote: I guess I have to be in the mode to write.
I think any Poet will echo you there. I know I do anyway.
Quote: Maybe if something good or bad happens, or if i am having some feelings
Writing about others, as you've done with this poem, is always a Noble effort <imo>, a way of saying..."I care". It think there are many side-benefits too, like; helping us flush out our thoughts and our compassion.
When I started writing my first lines; I think it was poetry, but <imo> only because the definition is so vast. Honestly, for quite a while, it was far more a purging then, that has proved to be an awesome life-tool to this very day. Egad
And... I have read a few of your poems in the past and did witness at least one drunken spew Thankfully, no one can prove any of mine.
Edit= Forgot, what about that Poet's-thread? RU making it or do you want me?
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Aculias
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Undefeatable Hero
Pretty Boy Angel Sacraficer
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posted August 27, 2011 05:58 AM |
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It dont matter. I will do like i said to Hamsi when i came up with the tossers thread.
You go ahead 7 create it & i will follow lol.
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