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Herry
Bad-mannered
Famous Hero
100% Devil
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posted April 09, 2014 09:04 AM |
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Edited by Herry at 10:41, 26 Apr 2014.
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there we go, i'm off to playing cod. now neraus please give your thoughts i can't wait to hear them.
EDIT: Chapter 4:
After the battle between Herry and his friends and the bandits they decided to take a break... hopefully kipshasz will return with new information about Lord valeriy.
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Herry and Fred were walking in the streets of the city, 'Good thing we didn't tell everyone about this, it would be disasterous', Herry says to himself while look at the others, the two kept walking until they reached a large building, which had a wooden door that has a sign on it, written with red paint "Stomach restaurant, eat till you drown." upon entering, they saw 2 to 4 people sitting at each table, eating their meals. after searching for an empty table, they sat, when they were about to start their talk, someone that was wearing a white suit, he had silver hair, green, sparkling eyes with a long nose, "Greetings, sir, i'm Alex, what would you like to have as your meal?"
'I didn't fail at my anticipation, this is a good place.'
"Some well fried, fresh meat."Herry says before turning to Fred, 'What about you?' was written all over his face.
"Some rotten meat, i'd like it to be sweet, and some blood soup please."Fred responds the question that he wasn't asked but obviously would be asked sooner or later. Herry was about to explode laughing at what he just said, 'fuhahahah!!! blood soup! ****ing ridicolous!'
"Yes sir!"answers Alex before turning around and going to the stone furnace to cook.
"Blood soup? Seriously? Does that even exist?"Asked Herry.
"In this place, it sure does."Fred responds with a wide smile on his faace.
**** Note: uncompleted due to the lack of time, hopefully i'm going to complete it when i come back. ****
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fred79
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posted April 26, 2014 11:59 AM |
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When the waiter returns with his blood soup, Fred sees that, yet again, it isn't made from fresh blood. So what does he do? The only thing that he ever DOES do in such a situation: he pulls his battered, scarred, and chipped axe, Mr. Kink, from his holster.
"Mr. Kink, are you thinking what I'm thinking?", Fred asks the nasty-looking business end of Mr. Kink, with a psychotic gleam in his eye.
Alex and Herry exchange a worried glance.
"Uh... Fred?", Herry is able to say, before Mr. Kink finds the waiter's face.
The waiter is knocked backward with the force of the blow, and crashes into some old wooden chairs, breaking them; and impaling some of the jagged spindles into his ribcage as he tumbles to the floor; his hands coming up far too late to try to defend himself. The attack was too fast; the initial puzzlement over what had been about to happen, too confusing.
Herry, his eyes dull and his body immobile with shock, just stands there, as Fred proceeds to yank Mr. Kink out of the waiter's face, using his boot to keep the head in place.
"You know, they should make axes with blood grooves", Fred ponders out loud, before finally pulling his axe free. The waiter is still moving on the ground; although, slowly, as he cannot breathe. His sinus cavity and mouth have been utterly destroyed; blood is pouring from the wound, now that the missing axe blade has given the body room to react.
Fred sits on the desperately heaving chest of the waiter, and waits patiently; tapping his foot to a tune only he can hear; for the movements, and the gurgling, to stop. When it does, he addresses his latest meal: "Well, Pez-Dispenser, it looks like I'm going to get fresh blood for my blood soup this time, huh?"
Herry finally reacts, by blowing vomit onto his shoes.
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Herry
Bad-mannered
Famous Hero
100% Devil
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posted April 26, 2014 01:57 PM |
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Fred, you forgot something, the reaction of the other people, well i bet it's shock and scaredy, lol.
Continuation:
"So what will you do if he doesn't bring fresh blood? suck his own?"Herry says jokingly, wearing a "" expression on his smiling face.
"Who knows? maybe more maybe less, depending on how old or fresh the blood is, at the best scenario he won't escape completely unharmed."Fred responds with a creepy look on his face that is capable of freezing hell and igniting heaven. The few people around them that heard him keep their distance, scared like cowards.
Suddenly, someone violently bashes the door, giving it a new home: the cold ground. the only two that were unaffected by his scary, and very cruel attitude were Fred and Herry, since they knew him and expected his coming.... not this early however. The man walked to their table and grabbed a seat, "Enjoying yourself, muppet?" and by muppet he meant Herry, which had gotten used to being called that. "Main topic...Any information on Lord Valeriy?"he asked, anticipating some information.
"Yup, and it goes by the name of "**** just got real", really, they are going to "execute" him which is a good thing for these bandit pieces of ****, and i'm afraid that if he really dies, what happened to erathia will happen to us." Surprisingly however, this man did not let go of his carefree expression. "We still, however, have a bit of time, we've got 2 weeks." Which indeed does explain why he hasn't let go of his carefree expression.
It was then that Alex came, handing the 2 friends their meals.
"Oh greetings, sir Kipshasz, What would you like to have?"Alex bows deeply that he was close to kissing the ground.
"The usual."Kipshasz responds.
'I somehow am not surprised...'
>> so that's about it, i didn't want this chapter to contain any action as most stories i've seen so far get the plot driven slowly. someone also said that the action at the beginning(The fight with the bandits) ruined the story. your thoughts and opinions are deeply appreciated, till next time, Herry.
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fred79
Disgraceful
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posted April 26, 2014 02:12 PM |
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Herry said:
Fred, you forgot something, the reaction of the other people, well i bet it's shock and scaredy, lol.
what other people? you mean the people who cleared out when we came in? don't you remember? what did you have to drink that night?
Herry said:
your thoughts and opinions are deeply appreciated, till next time, Herry.
but obviously not our involvement. boooooo...
i guess it was for the best, i was going to eat you next. i was actually building suspense, in anticipation of the certainty that you were going to join the waiter in my belly. however eventually. 
it might have been a short-lived suspense, though. 
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Herry
Bad-mannered
Famous Hero
100% Devil
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posted April 26, 2014 02:34 PM |
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thanks for your review, i hope you enjoyed this chapter, if i could, i would have included a bit of sexual content xD...
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OhforfSake
Promising
Legendary Hero
Initiate
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posted April 27, 2014 11:00 PM |
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Herry said:
well i decided to continue story but it doesn't give me room, someone reply so i can post a new chapter.
Placeholder post. 
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fred79
Disgraceful
Undefeatable Hero
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posted July 10, 2014 09:58 PM |
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fred79 said:
When the waiter returns with his blood soup, Fred sees that, yet again, it isn't made from fresh blood. So what does he do? The only thing that he ever DOES do in such a situation: he pulls his battered, scarred, and chipped axe, Mr. Kink, from his holster.
"Mr. Kink, are you thinking what I'm thinking?", Fred asks the nasty-looking business end of Mr. Kink, with a psychotic gleam in his eye.
Alex and Herry exchange a worried glance.
"Uh... Fred?", Herry is able to say, before Mr. Kink finds the waiter's face.
The waiter is knocked backward with the force of the blow, and crashes into some old wooden chairs, breaking them; and impaling some of the jagged spindles into his ribcage as he tumbles to the floor; his hands coming up far too late to try to defend himself. The attack was too fast; the initial puzzlement over what had been about to happen, too confusing.
Herry, his eyes dull and his body immobile with shock, just stands there, as Fred proceeds to yank Mr. Kink out of the waiter's face, using his boot to keep the head in place.
"You know, they should make axes with blood grooves", Fred ponders out loud, before finally pulling his axe free. The waiter is still moving on the ground; although, slowly, as he cannot breathe. His sinus cavity and mouth have been utterly destroyed; blood is pouring from the wound, now that the missing axe blade has given the body room to react.
Fred sits on the desperately heaving chest of the waiter, and waits patiently; tapping his foot to a tune only he can hear; for the movements, and the gurgling, to stop. When it does, he addresses his latest meal: "Well, Pez-Dispenser, it looks like I'm going to get fresh blood for my blood soup this time, huh?"
Herry finally reacts, by blowing vomit onto his shoes.
herry threw up so much, he died. fred ate him after hosing him off. the end.
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mvassilev
Responsible
Undefeatable Hero
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posted July 10, 2014 10:03 PM |
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fred79
Disgraceful
Undefeatable Hero
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posted July 10, 2014 10:07 PM |
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lol, that insult makes absolutely no sense. i like it. 
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Herry
Bad-mannered
Famous Hero
100% Devil
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posted July 25, 2014 12:35 PM |
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guys, if you said that because i haven't connected for so long, i'm not dead, i'm undead.
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NoobX
Undefeatable Hero
Now, this is a paradox...
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posted July 25, 2014 01:20 PM |
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He was hacking Brazzers 
Little Hairy is growing up so fast...
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Door knob resembles anus tap.
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fred79
Disgraceful
Undefeatable Hero
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posted July 25, 2014 04:40 PM |
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yayyyyy! now we can continue our bloodbath. now, where in the **** is masterlearn? was he eaten by a shark or something? does turkey have sharks?
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